I struggled with the theme for this month’s contest/challenge. The “Red Wheelbarrow,” wasn’t something that was particularly inspiring to me. Stalling my creative energies for a few days, attempting to craft something that was centralized around the theme. Initially, coming up with the idea of a farmhand who is uncaught serial killer, who uses a red wheelbarrow to dispose of his victims. Realizing rather quickly, that I would break the word limit, or be forced to craft an unsatisfying ending. Taking the dark, violent atmosphere from that idea and shifting gears some to something grim and apocalyptic. Mixing it with some other elements of that story to create a piece of flash fiction, I titled Stained Red.
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My father’s old black wheelbarrow was no longer the farm tool it once was. For years it had been filled various types of vegetables, hay, and manure. Now it was an instrument of horrible design, used to hull the corpses of those inflicted with a horrific virus. The infected were willing participants of experimental surgeries, that left bodies a mash of experimental surgical incisions. Even wrapped in thin black garbage bags, the cadavers leaked their bodily fluids pooling on the plastic shell. They were unintentionally leaving behind growing spots of dried blood that left sizeable spots of red on the black casing. With each hull of corpses, the patches of dried blood grew in both quantity and size. With one swift, strong lift, I deposited the bodies in the snow-covered trench. Hearing the snow crackle under the combined weight of the corpses. The almost endless winter was doing its best to hinder the decomposing process and the accompanying animals that fed on them.
The distinct sound of approaching footfalls audible in this frozen hellscape. Balancing out the old wheelbarrow on its small tire and rusting iron supports, before turning around. Their face obscured by wrap-around trapper hat, that revealed only their goggle covered eyes. Only a few of the scientists remaining here were bold enough to look upon the remnants of their failed research. A bright red cylindrical metal gas can visible in their right hand gripped between the fingers of heavy-duty black gloves. The figure was taking a stand a few steps away on my left side. Making a slight glance over at me in silence, that only served to amplify the empty tension between the two of us.
“Burn them,” the figure said, their voice being gargled and muffled to a point those were the only two words I understood. Setting the gas can onto the ground before walking away, leaving me to do the dirty work.
I was sighing some in annoyance, creating a small cloud of exhaled breath that was visible in the air. The distinct smell of petrol immediately hitting my nose while I lifted the gas can by the cold steel handle. My other hand was angling the gas-can to begin pouring the contents of the gas-can onto the trench while holding in a deep breath. I was doing my best not to inhale the fumes, listening to the gasoline weaving its way through the mass of wrapped cadavers. The noise was conjuring up memories of the babbling brooks and streams from my youth, creating vivid images of my father using the wheelbarrow to haul bushels of hay across the field. I could feel the smile spreading across my face at the thought.
The distinct aroma of gasoline whiffing itself into my nose shattering the picturesque memory, and forcing me to return to this grim reality. Hurling the empty fuel cannister across the trench, before taking one last look upon the covered up cadavers. Pondering some pseudo-religious sounding words to say aloud, that would act as improvised final rites for them regardless of their faith. I was fully aware the words would fall on deaf ears, but some things are sacred and traditional. Not wanting my words to become muffled, I pulled my facial covering down with three fingers. With one swift pull, I yanked the fabric down to my neck, enjoying the refreshing feeling of cold air rush over my unshaven face.
“No one asked for this plague to spread across this land, let alone be an unfortunate victim of the accompanying sickness. Your noble sacrifice in pursuing a cure for all of humanity will be etched into history for all to remember. Anything you left behind for your loved ones will be given to them when the time is right. God rest your souls, and may he have mercy on the survivors,” I said.
I turned and grabbed my father’s old wheelbarrow, now stained red with dried blood. Grabbing the warped wooden handles with one hand apiece, before, going a few short, quick pushes. Knowing this would have to be a quick goodbye to my father’s now bloodstained red wheelbarrow, and forcing the farm tool into the trench. Feeling some regret about destroying something my father bequeathed me, but understanding it was a bitter necessity of containing this infection. With only a few of us left untainted by the virus, it was only a matter of time before the search for a cure ended.
Taking an old, cheap, butane lighter out of my pocket, I rolled the spark wheel with care, having to repeat the motion a few times before, getting a small flame to appear. With the lighter now aflame, I hurled lighter into the trench, keeping a close eye on where it landed. Mere moments later, the corpses were beginning to burn. Watching some in awe, believing I had given a proper sendoff to my father’s now red wheelbarrow, and the dead. Turning around and beginning to stroll forward, doing my best to push the trickle of tears away. Becoming increasingly aware with each step I took, that this was indeed the end of the world.
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This was very dark but so well written. Tragic – the choice he needed to make.
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Thanks Kalpana
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Sad, sad, sad. The guy is coping the best he can, but there is not much hope left. His despair comes out clearly in your writing.
A note on grammar: you use the word ‘hull’ incorrectly. Judging from the context, it should be ‘haul’.
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I didn’t notice that, but thanks for reading.
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Hard choices. I am so glad that he found a brief solace in memories of better times. One minor quibble, dried blood isn’t red.
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And, did you mean to use experimental twice in the same sentence? It has a power of its own which I appreciated but experimental surgeries and experimental surgical incisions in the same sentence is ‘perhaps’ overkill.
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I did that more to bolster how desperate and dire the situation has become. Even though I did consider using questionable to describe surgeries but, I didn’t like how the sentence flowed.
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Can feel his hopelessness throughout, even as he trudges on. Having that memory only to return to the grim reality can at times be worse.
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Hi Christopher. What a sad story. Your MC was torn right to the end. I was wondering how the scenario would pan out – would he set the corpses alight or not? Or would he jump into the fire himself? It did indeed sound like the end of the world. I feel your writing has improved a lot since you started participating in WEP. You’re getting more emotion into your MC. Your paragraphing is spot on. To keep improving, I’d work on using the 5 senses.
Thanks for joining us again!
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Glad I kept you in suspense. Thanks Denise.
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A tragic tale – I felt his sorrow.
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I’m so glad he was able to find one lovely memory – even for such a fleeting moment. Well written and heartfelt
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Thanks Jemi
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Powerful and tragic, creating stark images of a possible future. One quibble: you craft intense phrases, but – for me – overuse -ing words. I had to re-read in places to get the full effect of your language. But overall, this was a good pice.
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Should be ‘piece’ at the end. Sorry.
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Thanks Roland.
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Dark – I’m good with that. A glimpse of what’s coming for the inhabitants of this little orb.
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Hi Christopher – I thought he was inadvertently going to set himself on light … in the way he was lighting the fire. But the thought of infections being left around to consume the rest of us has always worried me – a dose of the plague is probably where this world is heading … but foul to think about. Well done – I did enjoy your take – cheers Hilary
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Thanks Hillary.
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This is a dark story indeed. You created a chilling world here. Seeing that connection to his childhood destroyed, necessary as it was, made me feel for him and the situation he’s in. Well done!
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Thanks
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What a bleak world. The memories make this even more heart breaking. I fear this is truly the end of the world scenario for us humans; being wiped out by a virus we created either in chemical warfare, or finding some obscure cure.
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I wonder how many more left? Quite an intense piece.
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I’m a great fan of dystopian fiction. This was very well written.
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Thanks
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Hi,
Torn between what not to do. As I read your story, I thought of Hamlet and his soliloquy, To be or not to be, and in his case, to do or not to do. Your story was very dark and very sad. I had a sense of hopeless at the end.
Excellently written.
Shalom aleichem,
Pat G
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Thanks Pat.
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How sad and tragic. I’m not sure if the memory was a good thing or if it only made things worse. Great job on conveying such strong emotion. I do wonder, though, if the wheelbarrow should have started out red and ended up black due to all the dried blood?
In any case, thanks for sharing this dark and emotional story.
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Thanks Toi.
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A very dark and hard to read tale that reminded me of other similar burnings. What redeemed the story for me was that quest, unsuccessful so far, to end the illness, though the main character does not have much hope. The red wheelbarrow carried more than memory.
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Thanks
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Dark and disturbing. Great descriptions, though rather graphic. An intense tale. Reminded me of the ebola epidemic, though I guess the disposal and the remains themselves may have been different. I come from a culture which cremates the dead in open pyres, so the shock value of this is perhaps less for me than other readers.
A couple of points for you to consider – the use of ‘hull’, repetition of words and phrases close together and the use of gerunds at the start of sentences and clauses. That last can easily become monotonous for the reader. Also, pronouns can help e.g. – ‘With the lighter now aflame, I hurled (the) lighter into the trench..’ the second lighter can be replaced by ‘it’, avoids unnecessary repetition and makes for easier reading.
Thanks for sharing this flash. All the best.
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I will consider your advice in future enteries. Thanks for reading.
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Interesting take on the prompt. I liked the darkness of it and could feel the personal loss of the artifact. Nice job
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Thanks Dixie.
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Wow ! Grim reeper ! An untoward rôle thrust upon him.
Intense and powerful.
I agree with Roland about the word-packed sentences. Simple words can at times be more effective and meaningful, acting as a relief to the tension. A breath before hurtling on to the bitter end.
Good job. Your first options would have been more iffy cult to pull off in a 1000 words. Well chosen.
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